Status: Completed
Summary:
Created: January 30, 2015 | Updated: February 22, 2015
Genre : Action
Language : English
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| 1: | Chapter One | 1357 |
| 2: | Chapter Two | 1094 |
| 3: | Chapter Three | 1344 |
| 4: | Chapter Four | 783 |
| 5: | Chapter Five | 1930 |
| 6: | Chapter Six | 1039 |
| 7: | Chapter Seven | 619 |
| 8: | Chapter Eight | 1289 |
| 9: | Chapter Nine | 1266 |
| 10: | Chapter Ten | 786 |
| 11: | Chapter Eleven | 1209 |
| 12: | Chapter Twelve | 1249 |
| Total Wordcount: | 13965 |
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Chapter 1:
I only had the time to read Chater 1, but I wanted to let you know that your story has some real potential. I did see some common spelling errors, and small things that can be fixed. I did like how you let the diologue give you most of the description. However, their could be much more detail. Like explaining how the forest looks, and how they're feeling. It could something simple like being hungry, and craving eggs. Like I said I really think your story has a lot of potential, and I plan on reading it more. Keep up the good work.
June 5, 2018 | Sarah Relja
