X, a Action story | SparkaTale

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X

By: Michael Mann

Status: Completed

Summary:

A young man and Murderer was kidnapped and thrown into a forest with Nine other people. He must work together with these people to escape this nightmare of a forest. Please Critique

Created: January 30, 2015 | Updated: February 22, 2015

Genre : Action

Language : English

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Comments: 1

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1: Chapter One 1357
2: Chapter Two 1094
3: Chapter Three 1344
4: Chapter Four 783
5: Chapter Five 1930
6: Chapter Six 1039
7: Chapter Seven 619
8: Chapter Eight 1289
9: Chapter Nine 1266
10: Chapter Ten 786
11: Chapter Eleven 1209
12: Chapter Twelve 1249
Total Wordcount: 13965

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      Chapter 1:

       

      I only had the time to read Chater 1, but I wanted to let you know that your story has some real potential. I did see some common spelling errors, and small things that can be fixed. I did like how you let the diologue give you most of the description. However, their could be much more detail. Like explaining how the forest looks, and how they're feeling. It could something simple like being hungry, and craving eggs. Like I said I really think your story has a lot of potential, and I plan on reading it more. Keep up the good work.

      June 5, 2018 | Sarah Relja