Sparkatale

This is pretty dark. I love how you showed how depression can find it's way to anyone, even if they have a decent life. You also portrayed just how confusing it can be to suffer from it, and just how painful it can be. 

You got some humour in there as well- which I loved. It was really sad, yet it had me chuckling at a few points. The way she thinks is just so hilarious, specially how she tried to make it all poetic. That was a great touch! I usually do tend to enjoy dark-humour more than anything, so this was a plus for me.

Your writing it really simple, too! Everything seemed to flow smoothly, and it also got to the point. 

I really enjoyed seeing that there was a bright out-come to the story. Though you were very vague about the ending. Will she attempt to do it again? Or did she find that she wants to continue living? I guess it's up to the reader to make sense of it all. 

Good job, Natalie! Love you writing so far! 

Thanks, I tried. I'm not really good at describing things lol. This one actually gave me a hard time writing, I don't even think I did a very good job at it. The humor was a tough point, too. At first I had to get my head around how to write something sad, and then I had to switch it to something funny. 

Glad you liked it though, and I'm grateful for your comment, Emi~

Your writing style, at least in this story, was very neat. I liked the missing g's; it gave more personality to the character.

I didn't see any noticeable grammar errors, and your characterization was great. The story itself was dark, but the humor helped lighten it up a bit. I liked how you gave a bit of back story, while not dumping information on the reader.

Good job!