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Darcy

By: Chardonnay Boyd

Status: In Progress

Summary:

In the story Darcy we will be following a young woman as she speak of her story on how her childhood has gone and currently how her whole is going. From shortly meeting the man of shadows they begin to take a whirlwind down a road full of death and confusion. (Not for the faint of heart)

Created: November 17, 2013 | Updated: November 21, 2013

Genre : Drama

Language : English

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      • Chapter: 1 Reply

        I found this chapter quite choppy, and sometimes a little confusing. It’s better not to simply start a story with a description of the main character (at least in my opinion). The story would work better if it opened with a scene, either blending in the description with the action or simply waiting a while before describing your main character.

        I also found it a little jarring how quickly she clings to Darcy. At first I thought it would be some sort of dark, twisted relationship, but one minute she was afraid of him and the next he’s her best friend. I think this story has a lot of potential but I think it would be better to slow the pace down a bit ^^

        November 17, 2013 | Genevieve Middleton