Sparkatale

Oooh I like your introduction. This is written very well and aside from some very minor spelling errors that I've already forgotten about it has no mistakes that I can complain of. It does tend to drag on a little bit around the middle, but not because your details are excessive- your details are perfect- it's just that a few times it seemed to lose focus, but only for a few seconds before returning to the story. Anyway, I enjoy it and I really hope you're going to continue writing this because I'll read more. :)