Sparkatale

This was good, and yes, it was mysterious (Well Done) and pretty well-detailed. It bodes well for the next chapter, and I'll be looking forward to reading this. However, there are some things I would like to point out. 1. The entire chapter is grouped together, like a wall of text, and sometimes that puts readers off. You should start using paragraphs to prevent the entire chapter being bunched together, as well as starting a new line whenever someone speaks or thinks about something. 2. If you are adding author's notes, you should put it in bold in order to differentiate it from the rest of the chapter. Other than those 2 pointers, it looks good. Looking forward to read more!