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Hey there, everyone! I'm Tavon Wright, and I'm planning to be an aspiring authoress/TV producer. It would be wonderful to write a show based on my stories....
One thing you need to know is that I'm Christian; Judeo-Christian to be exact. Therefore, I will have lots of references to my faith, as I'm planning to write Christian novels. I'm not afraid to show my support for Israel, or my faith for God. I love Him, and I'm going to show that by putting Him in everything I do. If you love my stories for this, I don't have a problem with that. If you don't...I don't have a problem with that either. I love both praisers and haters equally.
You can also find me on FictionPress, Fanfiction, and deviantART under the pen name: iheartgod175. If you're wondering why I have the same name, it's so people can know who I am-and it helps me to remember the same name, too.
Anyways, enjoy, and God Bless!
I would have to say that this story is one of the most interesting I've read since coming onto Sparkatale. The premise of the story (beautiful people with the coldest hearts you can imagine) caught my attention, and it's handled well. The characters that I'm most interested in is Lucky, Euphemia and Roxan. My personal theory is that Lucky's the one posing as BS, the school's gossip column writer. Correct me if I'm wrong, but that's just my guess. One thing to be careful of is the constant switching of POV's. You had the prolouge in 3rd-person, and then the next chapter you had the POV of three characters; the next chapter, you introduced some more characters and their POVs. I understand that you want to show how each character differs from each other, but the switching can be jarring for most readers. I myself can relate to that; the first draft of my book, The Energists, had the main characters switch POV's constantly. I did that so I could have a "reader-character" bond of sorts. It was when one of my reviewers told me that it was hard for her to care about either of the characters because of the switching that I decided to do the entire story in the main character's POV, as it started out with him. My suggestion would be to either choose one of the characters and put the story in their POV, or go with 3rd person. That way, you can get some reviews to this story, and not just reads and views. Of course, the final decision is up to you. Either way, I will make sure to follow this story, and update soon! -Tavon Wright
Reviewed on: January 21, 2014
It is Carl Clover from Blazblue, whose appearance Waldo is inspired by. When I first created him, Carl's appearance was the first thing that came to mind.
Commented on: February 19, 2015