Sparkatale

Thanks for pointing that out. I will beta read my stuff better next time.

I was very indecisive about how I was to present the conflict between Trey and his family even while I was writing this, so basically I REALLY winged the first chapter. The upcoming chapters are just as turbulent in terms of how i am going to present them, but i will take your advice into consideration. 

This story is me getting back in story writing after almost giving up completely on writing. So i appreciate the feedback. 

This was okay. I felt a bit confused as to what was going on for most of the story however, so maybe in these one shot stories you could be a little more clear. But otherwise the general concept of what you were trying to portray here was cool.