Sparkatale

- your English is a little iffy at times and sometimes you're missing punctuations.

-you frequently switch from present (i think) tense to past tense.  I recommend writing with one form of tense.

-I recommend separating the wall of text at the end into several smaller paragraphs, that way it'll be easier to read.

but overall you have a good set up.  I think its cool how the main character has chronic comas that only his grandpa can snap him out of.