Sparkatale

I really enjoyed the two chapters that I've read so far. Erb is an interesting character full of energy. Dialogues in your story are also quite fluent with nice descriptions outlining the world that you have created with your words.

There's a few odd formatting issues here and there but overall I have taken a liking to this story. Good job!

Love your description and the dynamics of the characters. Also adore the references to Japanese terms as I love their culture and their language. This story makes me feel as if I am watching an anime, which is quite rare for me.

There are some odd sentences / structuring of words here and there with minor punctuation errors but they don't detract me from enjoying the first chapter.

Will certainly read on. This is definitely peaked my interest. Good job!