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Critique My Summary?

I have such a hard time writing summaries, especially succinct ones. When I look at what I have now, all I can think is: it can be so much better. I feel like there is a certain set of words in a certain arrangement that unlocks the flow of readership. As it stands now, I feel like it's just not drawing in the crowds.

by Niek Morenta | Aug 31st 2013, 22:45


  • Here is the summary, by the way. Velry was locked away for a year, prisoner to unspeakable horrors at the hand of the Blood Court. She escaped, but not without a little help from Niek, a Keeper naturally born with necromantic powers. Together, the two of them will take Norisys by storm as they hunt down the undead abominations, each mission leading them one step closer to the Blood Queen. Velry will have her revenge... If Niek doesn't let the cat out of the bag first.

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    Niek Morenta | August 31, 2013


  • I'm not great with summaries, but I will say that it was good enough that I wanted to read your story. Especially considering the length of your chapters, so while maybe not perfect it isn't bad.

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    D.M. Gergen | September 1, 2013


  • Thanks. I'll definitely try and make the chapters a little smaller. Break them up so they're not so daunting. :)

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    Niek Morenta | September 1, 2013


  • I feel as if your book has great potential, one from the summary, and two from the top note that you left. My advice to you would be language is key! When you start throwing in too many references to what is unknown or has to be read to understand it may make the reader simply skip over it. Also, I am assuming that this book is supposed to have a more serious note to it but the "let the cat out of the bag" tid-bit might make it come off as slightly less intense, leaning more towards comedic. Other than that I though it was a very effective summary. :)

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    Elizia Brittian | September 13, 2013


  • I don't think its bad, i say a good summary or title should make readers want to read of find what your stories are about (that's just my opinion). But i think its pretty good that fact that i actually want to read your story now, based on your summary alone.

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    F.D. Charles | September 1, 2013


  • Thanks. I agree with what you said, that it should make them want to read it. I guess I'm just a stickler for making it as perfect as possible. If you do read it, please leave a comment! :)

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    Niek Morenta | September 1, 2013


  • Sure will. :3

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    F.D. Charles | September 2, 2013


  • It isn't bad, really. Summaries are honestly something I think almost every writer has problems with, but yours is pretty good actually. The summary does a good job of highlighting the premise, MC's motivation\goal and the main protagonists and antagonists, so I think it's actually a pretty good summary.

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    A . Nonymous | September 2, 2013


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