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Well to get the ball rolling, I want someone to review my story Blood Trail so I'd like to do a review exchange with whoever is interested. :)

The Tigress | November 8, 2014

I'd be interested. Could you review my story On Wings of a Dragon if I review yours?

Nicole Armas | November 8, 2014

I'd be happy to review both of your stories as well! Although I'll be a bit busy so it won't be until Wednesday (I'm estimating here)

But if I have time to do it sooner, I'll definitely get on it!

Mighty (Emi) Pen (Valladarez) | November 8, 2014

Sure I'll get around to reading both of your stories some time tomorrow!

The Tigress | November 8, 2014

Well I'll read Nicole's story but Emi has 2 stories so tell me which one you'd like me to review and I'll get to that one as well. ^^

The Tigress | November 8, 2014

Sounds good, if you can 'Skies of Avalon' is my main project right now. Thanks a lot! :) I'll get on reading Nicole's story, as well as yours Tigress!

Mighty (Emi) Pen (Valladarez) | November 8, 2014

Alright! I'm finally home so I'll start reading you guys's stories now!

The Tigress | November 9, 2014

Ok, I reviewed both of your stories. :) Sorry it took so long. I wanted to give good, helpful reviews so I took my time with them. I hope I was able to help!

The Tigress | November 9, 2014

Thanks! I'm getting on top of reviewing both your stories now, too!

Mighty (Emi) Pen (Valladarez) | November 9, 2014

Hey!
I was actually wondering if anyone would like to review 1 of 2 works of mine? My novels in question are 'In Love With Air' and 'This Is Why I'm Afraid'. They're both completed, YA novels but I'm resolutely terrible when it comes to editing and the like. 

I will, of course, review an equal amount of works in return!

Danny Power Hallihan (Dormant) | November 10, 2014

I was actually interested in reading This Is Why I'm Afraid earlier so I'll gladly read and review it for you! I'll try to get to it done some time today or tomorrow. And you can review Blood Trail for me. :)

The Tigress | November 10, 2014

By all means, take your time! 
I'll get to reading 'Blood Trail' right away!

Danny Power Hallihan (Dormant) | November 10, 2014

Ok I'll hopefully be getting to doing your review tonight. I want to update my story by tomorrow though so first I have to work on writing for a little while but then I'll get to your story!

The Tigress | November 10, 2014

Hello - again!
If anyone would be ever so kind and review a Nanowrimo project for me (co-authored with ze lovely Emi Valladerez) I would review a story of your choice in gratitude. 

The link is even here and waiting for you - you cannot get more convenient than that folks! 

http://sparkatale.com/books/details/2548

(I write from the character 'Dylan's' point of view - while Emi writes from 'Sylvia's'

Danke schon!

Danny Power Hallihan (Dormant) | November 13, 2014

I have no idea when I can get around to it, but I'll read it! No review is necessary in return as you both have already reviewed my story anyway. :) 

The Tigress | November 13, 2014

Uhh... Hi. I sort of wrote this weird story called Stalk (http://sparkatale.com/books/details/2667) and was wondering if I could get any critique on it since it's a kind of story I don't normally write. XD

Kain Delo | November 18, 2014

Sure! I'll review it for you, and my story is Blood Trail- a review on that would be greatly appreciated. I'll get to your review probably tomorrow.

The Tigress | November 18, 2014

Hello Peoplez!

I am looking for someone to review on my story, Callie Cameron - Country Chaos.

I know the title's pretty lame, but i think the story's a good bit interesting.

Here's just a little insight: Callie Cameron (note the title) is the masked, 18 year old alter-ego of Lilly Ann Martins, an as-ordinary-as-you-can-get teen.

And here's the Summary: The Martin family takes a trip out to the country to visit their extended family and help them move to their new home. But it doesn't take long for Lilly Ann to figure out that there's something not quite right going on... starting with the masked figure who calls himself the Shadow Rider.

Okay, I hope that wasn't overdoing it, but i would LOVE for someone to read it and tell me what you think!

Alright... and with the review exchange if you want to do that:

PLEASE, if it's romance, only good, clean romance. No cussing or swearing (for any story)

and PLEAse please please no sci-fi. I'm afraid i don't understand it one iota.

So... yeah. I sound like a demanding brat. :(

well... Thanks!

Laterz!

Keely Kelly | December 12, 2014

I'd love to read your story. It seems interesting! :) Warning: not sure WHEN I'll have time but I will certainly try to read it soon. Please read my story Blood Trail (I am curently re-editing the chapters so overlook any little flaws in narration although there shouldn't be all that many to begin with). Don't worry it doesnt curse (unless you count "hell" and "dammit" every once in a while), and there is romance but it's clean. Aaaaand it's post-apocalyptic. I'd post the summary but I'm on my phone.

The Tigress | December 12, 2014

I'll take a gander at your story and leave comments, interesting premise for a story by the way!

I'm editing two stories at the moment - 'This Is Why I'm Afraid' and 'In Love With Air' if you like to look at either in exchange? 

Danny Power Hallihan (Dormant) | December 21, 2014

Hey guys, if you want to give someone a good review, here are a few good questions I found that you can answer while reading someone's work. I think it will help the writer a lot if they know what you think about the following things:

1. Is anything confusing?

2. Are any scenes boring or repetitious?

3. Do you spot any general tics (repeated words, etc.)?

4. Do you spot any confusing plot points (let me know when and where I lose you and what needs to be clarified)?

5. Does the opening grab you?

(These types of questions are effective with chapter-by-chapter comments)

If you've read an entire story and want to give an overall review, try to answer these questions:

1. Was the setting clear? Did you feel like you had a clear idea of what things looked like in the scenes?

2. Can you give me a brief opinion of the main characters? Did you understand who was who and what their problems/goals were? Any characters that felt out of place? Any characters you felt you were supposed to like, but didn’t? Any characters you had a hard time keeping track of?

3. Did the plot keep you engaged? Did the overall arc make sense?

4. Any problems with the dialogue?

5. Ditto for the narrative? Were there any places where you were bored with it?

6. Did the beginning grab you?

7. Did the middle keep your attention?

8. Was the ending satisfying?

9. After reading the first scene, what expectations did you have for the story? Were those expectations fulfilled?

11. Did the action rise appropriately? Did it move too abruptly?

12. Was it repetitive or overlong? Can you think of anything it would be good to cut? Is there anyplace I need to trim some fat and include less information?

13. Did you understand the themes, and did they become more complex and interesting as you read? Did the character arcs express the themes well?

14. Was the climax both inevitable and yet unexpected?

15. Was the story easy to follow?

16. Does the overall tone welcome you? Or is it off-putting in any way?

17. Was there any point at which your interest faded?

Following this guide can help to improve someone's writing and can be very helpful. I hope you guys find it useful. :)

The Tigress | December 13, 2014

Awesome! Thanks for posting this, I'll keep this in mind the next time I review someone's story.

Nicole Armas | December 14, 2014

Glad I could help! They're not mine- I saw them on an author's blog that I had been reading a few days ago and thought I'd share them. I might put them up in a more permanent spot at some point.

The Tigress | December 14, 2014

I'm looking for someone who's familiar with the movie Dragonheart to review a short fanfic of mine called "The Last Dragon". It's written from the perspective of Draco and his view on the events of the movie.

Nicole Armas | December 23, 2014

I'm not familiar with that series, sorry. :/

The Tigress | December 28, 2014

If someone wouldn't mind reading it... :D

I have a new story up! Am still working on the old, but this one is more of a romance... Here's the summary!

After Ashton's mother died when he was seven his whole world turned upside down. He never expected that a girl in Pink Converse Tennis shoes would turn his world around... and make it all the better

Thanks! Laterz!

Keely Kelly | December 30, 2014

I'll read it for you. :) I also have to continue your other story- I'll be getting to it soon again once I go about making my usual rounds.

The Tigress | December 31, 2014

Thank you :)

I DID finally get around to reading the first chapter of Blood Trail (that was your story right???)

Hope to read more soon as i have time! :)

Keely Kelly | January 2, 2015

Hello all, would any of you be willing to read and review my story if I read yours as well? It's called The Orphan's Code and I'm trying to get as many readers as I can to get some feedback before I publish it. Thank you ^^ 

Catherine Rose Hillin | January 1, 2015

Yeah I'll take a look at it. :) I believe you've already read Blood Trail, so it's only fair. It may (or may not) take me a while to get to it.

The Tigress | January 1, 2015

Sweet!

Catherine Rose Hillin | January 18, 2015

Hi there, I am going to post the first chapter of my story Marked Book 1: A Darker Power soon and was wondering if anybody would be interested in reading it, I would be quite happy to read yours in return. I believe Emi has already read the first three chapters of the original draft, The Legend of Kilarin Stormrider so perhaps you would like to read the new and improved version?

Also, I think Nicol Armas said she would like to read it when I asked for a review exchange in the forums?
Anyway, here's the summary:
Once, this realms knew peace. The five nations lived together in harmony, the ancient kings all working together for harmony under the great gods. But now everything has changed.
 Vallin and Aldarian are forever at war, have been for almost six  and a half centuries. The Aldarians erected the Borders to protect themselves, great walls of stone filled with able men, Bordermen, to defend them. But rumors are spreading, Vallin is amassing an army, one made of Dragon Speakers and their mounts, Elementals, Mages and even Elvenkind. It seems all hope is lost. 

• However, unknown to both the Vallinians and the Aldarians, to the entire realm. One was born in the lands of Xlan, one with the ability to end this war once and for all. Afraid of this power and its consequences he fled to the Borders once of age and has hidden there for years. Now as the final, decisive action falls into place he must decide, will he save this realms? Or let or plunge into chaos? 

This is the journey of the Marked
 

Gracie Rose | January 22, 2015

I'll gladly take a look into your improved version! I enjoyed your last draft, so I'm sure this one won't disappoint! :)

Mighty (Emi) Pen (Valladarez) | January 22, 2015

Thanks a lot. I'll get it up ASAP. Just while your waiting I've got a short Drabble I wrote to get over my writers block a while back that I've posted if you wanted to take a look at it. :)

Gracie Rose | January 22, 2015

Okay. The prologue is up. :)

Gracie Rose | January 22, 2015

Read it! I'm impressed, you've improved in such a short amount of time! Good job!

Mighty (Emi) Pen (Valladarez) | January 23, 2015

I would love some honest reviews on my in-progress Fantasy story, Thief and would be happy to do a review exchange with anyone willing.

Molly Witten | January 24, 2015

I'll take a look. Could you review my story "On Wings of a Dragon"?

Nicole Armas | January 24, 2015

Yeah, I'll take a look too if you could read mine, A Darker Power. A fantasy story you say? YES!

Gracie Rose | January 24, 2015

Would anybody mind reviewing one of my stories. You can do To Be Dead, or Into The Dark, or both if your feeling adventurous.

Michael Mann | January 28, 2015

Okay, so apparently my imagination had become a funky well. Every time I put the bucket down something different comes up! So now I have 'another' version of the first few chapters. The first section will probably be similar but a few details will be different and it will be longer. Hopefully I will have it up soon. :)

Gracie Rose | January 28, 2015

Okay, the new prologue is up. I'm much happier with this one and hopefully it will stay the same for more then a week. :) Sorry for me and my stupid brain that keeps thinking up new things to add. Was there a story you wanted me to read for you in return for you reading Marked?

Gracie Rose | January 29, 2015

Hey Guys and Gals!

I was actually wondering if someone could read a prolog of mine? It's called "I. Am. Aidan. Ianess" and it will be about the first Artifical Intelligence who runs from the purpose he was created to do, and a college student who stumbles across him while the 'Men In Suits' search for it. I would appreciate feedback! 

http://sparkatale.com/books/view/2979/12620

I will, of course, comment/ review a story of your choosing in return.

Thank you in advance!

Danny Power Hallihan (Dormant) | February 1, 2015

Good afternoon!

I have written the prolog for a new fantasy/murder novel that I have planned: The Wolf In The Woods. If anyone would like to review or give their comments on that particular short piece I would of course return the favor with a reiview on one of your novels.

http://sparkatale.com/Books/details/3254

Thank you!

Danny Power Hallihan (Dormant) | April 13, 2015