The World, a Adventure story | SparkaTale

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The World

By: Dindeen Jaro

Status: Completed

Summary:

The ancient Earth no longer exists. The planet was nearly reduced to a wasteland, but nature and mankind persevered. After many years, the one who led mankind through their hardships was lost to them. Until one day, droplets of the Overlord's Black Blood were discovered near Town #27. Into the massive oak forest, into the Desert Beyond- will they find her?

Created: November 15, 2013 | Updated: January 17, 2014

Genre : Adventure

Language : English

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1: Prologue: Wake Up 172
2: Chapter I: Preparations for the Journey [Discovered at Sunrise: Black Blood] 1048
3: Chapter I: Preparations for the Journey [History of the World] 903
4: Chapter II: The Oak Forest [What Lies Beneath] 730
5: Chapter II: The Oak Forest [Hunted] 426
6: Chapter II: The Oak Forest [Death Match] 809
7: Chapter II: The Oak Forest [Mold] 1038
8: Chapter II: The Oak Forest [Repose] 610
9: Chapter II: The Oak Forest [Grey Blood] 800
10: Chapter III: The Desert Beyond [Bright Night Sky] 548
11: Chapter III: The Desert Beyond [Invisible] 989
12: Chapter III: The Desert Beyond [Defiance] 767
13: Chapter III: The Desert Beyond [Trust] 460
14: Chapter III: The Desert Beyond [Solitary Hunter] 889
15: Chapter III: The Desert Beyond [Blue Blood] 430
16: Chapter III: The Desert Beyond [Resolute] 868
17: Chapter IV: 144 [Passers-by] 468
18: Chapter IV: 144 [Linnorm] 1040
19: Chapter IV: 144 [Regrets] 659
20: Chapter IV: 144 [Utopia] 817
21: Chapter IV: 144 [The Search Ends] 618
22: Chapter IV: 144 [The Town at Night] 521
23: Chapter IV: 144 [Empty Streets] 656
24: Chapter IV: 144 [Conclusion] 671
25: Chapter V: Revelation [Save Me] 986
26: Chapter V: Revelation [Reintroductions] 520
27: Chapter V: Revelation [Deliverance] 997
28: Chapter V: Revelation [Red] 905
29: Chapter V: Revelation [Dead or Damned] 983
30: Chapter V: Revelation [Schism] 1022
31: Chapter V: Revelation [Into the Mist] 876
32: Chapter V: Revelation [Lair of the Beasts] 1071
33: Chapter V: Revelation [Crisis] 876
34: Chapter VI: Journey Home [Unspoken] 692
35: Chapter VI: Journey Home [Deicide] 1470
36: Chapter VI: Journey Home [Skinship and Detours] 699
37: Chapter VI: Journey Home [Chronicle] 998
38: Chapter VI: Journey Home [Run] 1067
39: Chapter VI: Journey Home [Enduring] 1016
40: Chapter VI: Journey Home [Before the Sun Rises] 677
41: Chapter VI: Journey Home [Fight or Flight] 831
42: Chapter VII: Eastbound [Confidante] 522
43: Chapter VII: Eastbound [Humans] 627
44: Chapter VII: Eastbound [Little Issues] 559
45: Chapter VII: Eastbound [Helpers] 795
46: Chapter VII: Eastbound [From the North] 862
47: Chapter VII: Eastbound [Here Lies Linnorm] 1101
48: Chapter VIII: The Iron Wall [Flesh and Bone] 1014
49: Chapter VII: Eastbound [Rulers of the World] 656
50: Chapter VIII: The Iron Wall [The End Begins] 508
51: Chapter VIII: The Iron Wall [Wolf] 500
52: Chapter VIII: The Iron Wall [Stone Coffin] 537
53: Chapter VIII: The Iron Wall [Seaside] 1067
54: Chapter VIII: The Iron Wall [Gods] 769
55: Chapter VIII: The Iron Wall [Clash of Black Roses] 1091
56: Chapter VIII: The Iron Wall [Absolute] 1009
57: Chapter IX: The New World [Dance of Immortals] 1080
58: Chapter IX: The New World [The Perfect Rose] 989
59: Chapter IX: The New World [Conflagration] 1031
60: Chapter IX: The New World [Apocalypse] 1230
61: Chapter IX: The New World [The Darkest Chasm] 1178
62: Chapter IX: The New World [And then, there was rain.] 682
63: Chapter IX: The New World [Their Stories] 780
64: Chapter IX: The New World [The Flow of Time] 580
65: Chapter IX: The New World [Beginning] 454
66: Epilogue [Sleep Well] 428
Total Wordcount: 52672

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      • Chapter: 2 Reply

        Definitely a hooking start! Sets up for a grand adventure, of course. Not quite sure what Black Blood is, but I'm interested to find out... 

        Just two things I wanted to ask about: it seems that your first chapter is a repeat, and is written twice on the document. Also, is there any particular reason you're using italics for dialogue? It is unconventional, but if there's any way you can justify it--like the usage of two different languages, then it's fine. Otherwise, dialogue should be written in normal type. 

        This story looks well written so far. There is so little to work with, so I won't critique on character development... yet. Haha, but you're doing a great job. I'm assuming that some of the characters are based on Chinese due to their names...? Well, keep going! Great starts need great finishes!

        November 16, 2013 | Liz uli


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        As for the repeated lines. I have edited it out. Regarding the italicized dialogue, I was used to writing it that way because on some sites the character spacing is too narrow, therefore dialogue is difficult to differentiate from narration. I've edited out that format and will be sticking to quotation marks.

         

        Thank you for taking the time to read my work, and especially for actually commenting and stating something constructive.

        November 16, 2013 | Dindeen Jaro