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Caring Dance

By: Hope J.D.

Status: Completed

Summary:

A short story that won third place in a contest. It's based off of a song called Caring Dance by nekomata master.

Created: October 19, 2013 | Updated: October 19, 2013

Genre : Romance

Language : English

Reviews: 1 | Rating:

Comments: 2

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1: Caring Dance 526
Total Wordcount: 526

Reviews (1)


  • D.M. Gergen

    As always, Koizumi does a great job with creating an almost full-bodied world while giving readers just a small glimpse into a world and story. This like the other short stories on this site takes little more than 2-3 minutes to read yet somehow despite the brevity the reader can easily picture the scene and feel the emotions. I will say that the ending leaves you wanting more and obviously has many questions unanswered, but definitely worth reading along with Koizumi's other work.

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    You're very good with creating a vibrant world in a very low word count.  I would say that with this one more than the rest I want to know more about what's going  on.  It's very good.

    October 19, 2013 | D.M. Gergen


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    Only grammar mistake I found was the capitalized She after the woman's thoughts in the second paragraph.

    October 19, 2013 | D.M. Gergen