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Tales from Dragenia

By: Zach Wood

Status: In Progress

Summary:

all it takes is one second. One simple second for everything to change forever. And for two civilizations, nothing will be the same. Dragenia. a small planet from Messier 32, a small galaxy orbiting the Andromeda galaxy, is where colonists from the Milky Way will call home, and where two native races vie for control. for thousands of years, the two races of the planet have co-existed with..... a less then stellar history. The Gaharots, a race of raptor-like creatures known for their technological prowess, are being suppressed and enslaved by their neighbors, the Ferids, a humanoid race capable of transforming into mighty beasts called Aerids, or as we call them, Dragons. Things are reaching a fever pitch on the mainland, but far from the mainland is where the most important events will transpire. The sub-continent of Evioly is home to close-to-nature tribes of Ferids who live side-by-side with their Gaharot compatriots in peace and equality. In a small village on top of a mesa lives a little girl, a girl who shall bring with her an extraordinary destiny. Her life, and the life of everyone on the planet, will change forever when colonists from the Milky Way Galaxy come to establish a new home. Sokuro, a girl from the planet with an important destiny. Bran, a boy from the stars in search of a home. These two shall bring about a great change to Dragenia, and it will all begin with a chance encounter and a important discovery.

Created: October 16, 2017 | Updated: March 7, 2024

Genre : Fantasy

Language : English

Reviews: 2 | Rating:

Comments: 6

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1: Prologue: State of the World 1159
2: Chapter 1: A Whole New World 6440
3: Chapter 2: The Boy from the Stars 8643
4: Chapter 3: The Girl with the Scale 9599
5: Chapter 4: Sokuro's and Bran's fated encounter 9250
6: Tales from Dragenia Intro 1451
7: Chapter 5: Failure to Communicate 6362
8: Chapter 6: Budding Friendship 6413
9: Chapter 7: Fast Bonds 6871
10: Chapter 8: Sokuro's First Battle 9567
11: Chapter 9: Rough First Contact 7783
12: Chapter 10: Aftermath 6622
13: Chapter 11: Second Chance at First Contact 5713
14: Chapter 12: Discovery of Universal Proportions 9797
15: Chapter 13: The First Day 8773
16: Chapter 14: Eagerness 6088
17: Chapter 15: In a Name 6309
18: Chapter 16: Roko Harbor 9365
19: Chapter 17: Hunting 7275
20: Chapter 18: Dragons in Space 7065
21: Chapter 19: Movie Night 5789
22: Chapter 20: Lurking Evil 7404
23: Chapter 21: Koloron Part 1 Departure 4803
24: Chapter 22: Koloron Part 2 Preparations 6936
25: Chapter 23: Koloron Part 3: The First Leg 6773
26: Chapter 24: Koloron Part 4 Rest and Kidnapping 6629
27: Chapter 25: Koloron Part 5 Escape 11500
28: Chapter 26: Koloron Finale - Glimpse of the Past 9339
29: Chapter 27: Secret Wounds 9784
30: Chapter 28: No Rest for the Weary 5515
31: Chapter 29: Into the Golden Gate... 11313
32: Tales from Dragenia: Lost Souls 1705
33: Chapter 30: ... to a World of Parallels 5392
34: Chapter 31: The Whereabouts of Others 7217
35: Chapter 32: New Lands, New Problems 8139
36: Chapter 33: Welcome to the Hotel Nexia 9673
37: Chapter 34: Isle of Origins 10196
38: Chapter 35: First Night 10686
39: Chapter 36: Deterorating Affairs 9591
40: Chapter 37: Breaking and Entering 9415
41: Chapter 38: To The Celebration 10967
42: Chapter 39 : Until someone gets hurt... 5052
43: Chapter 40 ...it's all fun and games 10277
44: Chapter 41: A Dance of Shadows 11868
45: Chapter 42: Sokuro and the General 10992
46: Chapter 43: Reunions and Reveals 10134
47: Chapter 44: The Second Night 8533
48: Chapter 45: Death and a Door 8732
49: Chapter 46.1: Convergence 7284
50: Chapter 46.2: Sokuro vs Termundus 10473
51: Chapter 47: Back Together 11489
52: Chapter 48: Downfall 8509
53: Chapter 49: Emotional Breather 6072
54: Chapter 50: Birthday Relaxations 5816
55: Chapter 51: Troublemakers in the Museum 8888
56: Chapter 52: Spelunking Gone Wrong 5025
57: Chapter 53: Tomb Mappers and Monsters 10286
58: Chapter 54: Revelations 6314
59: Chapter 55 : Resc.... Sav.... dealing with the mutt and a ship 8198
60: Chapter 56: Favor 7341
61: Chapter 57: Shopping Spree 9338
62: Chapter 58: Prep Work 6961
63: Chapter 59: Issues 7062
64: The World of Dragenia: Legend of Dawn 994
65: Chapter 60: Set Sail!!! 8386
66: Chapter 61: Descent to Blood 10243
67: Chapter 62: Snap 6406
68: Chapter 63: This is the Treasure? 8342
69: Chapter 64: Argax Ends Tied 7017
70: Chapter 65: So Much for Niceties 4029
71: Chapter 66: Nightmare Life 3665
72: Chapter 67: Arrival A'Vendetta 5660
73: Chapter 68: I'll be the bad guy 6486
74: Chapter 69: Exploring is getting old 4749
75: Chapter 70: Prelude to Disaster 4991
76: Chapter 71: Felladae 7467
77: Chapter 72: Tragedy 10034
78: Chapter 73: Wrath of Shadows 1 - Rebirth of the Damned 4798
79: Chapter 78: Wrath of Shadows 2 - Abomination of Nature 6096
80: Chapter 75: Wrath of Shadows 3- Rage of the Innocent 3900
81: Chapter 76: Wrath of Shadows 4 - Last Stand 10845
82: Chapter 77: Wrath of Shadows 5 - Golden Fire 2583
83: Chapter 78: The Way Back 7387
84: Chapter 79: Cavern of Halls 7757
85: Chapter 80: Home 7374
86: Chapter 81: Borderline Fantastical 5793
Total Wordcount: 638957

Reviews (2)


  • Donald Zeigler

    A very enjoyable story. Charming and believable young heroes in an exotic fantasy world. A parent could read this to a child and keep their attention while also having a good read for themselves.

    Rating:
    September 29, 2019 Flag


  • Hearm jan

    Amazing narrative! Good sammary and the prologue is nice. I like the narration and I think this is a good one.

    Rating:
    December 20, 2018 Flag


Comments / Critiques


    • Chapter: 3 Reply

      Just starting the next chapter now - this comment will be written on my mobile so it'll probably just be a wall of text and spelling mistakes so I apologize ^^` I do like Daniel and Bran's banter, it's believable, snappy and witty. They have very clear personality traits, and the early dialogue flows very well. New characters are announced; I was actually surprised by Arlye and his non-human origins - this is a real mix of different species already, and humans would already be in contact with other forms of life. It was an interesting update! Again the conversation between him and Georgia Crox was believable and interesting. You could tell that they were well-acquainted. This chapter does a better job than the worst of describing the world they're on, seen through the eyes of a human for the first time as opposed to Sokoro and her kind who are well used to their surroundings. I guess the complaints here are the same as the first chapter; there's a lot of tense-swapping here (something I'm still struggling with myself!) where you move from past tense to present tense and then back again. If you're ever editing there would be no harm going back over your work to decide which tense would suit better. Another is the description of the ships themselves - there is a ton of description all in one paragraph, where to most people and readers they would never notice every single thing about an object on first glance. Some description is fine but the over-saturation of describing the ship took me out of it for a second. You can sprinkle descriptions of the shop throughout the entire chapter to spread out the info (for example, mention its size in one paragraph, mention its thrusters in another paragraph when it lands, mention its shape in another paragraph as people leave the ship and observe it etc.) Other than that this was another solid chapter though - it expanded on the first and introduced more characters and backstories and gave us another POV and I really appreciated it. Good job!

      July 16, 2021 | Danny Power Hallihan (Dormant)


    • Reply

      yeah.... it's a issue for me. i hopefully improved as it went on.

      July 16, 2021 | Zach Wood


    • Reply

      Ah there's no worries on that! My work is always the same before going back on it and finding the things to edit ^^' there's a solid story here!

      July 16, 2021 | Danny Power Hallihan (Dormant)


    • Chapter: 4 Reply

      Hi, I just took a look into chapter 3 (do let me know if my constant comments are annoying lol) but what I can immediately say is that there's definite improvement compared to the previous two chapters, a bit less tense-mixing than the others, and a lot more world-building. Sokoro is really coming into her own as a character; her excitement is very clearly visible, and honestly I didn't expect to see back-story about her parents. It adds a bit more weight, obviously going through such a trumatic event and still smiling despite it all. 

      Again, more world-building, touching on the festival and mentioning the excitement surrounding the Silver Aerid (nicely showcasing that the big world-altering change is actually the human's arrival, I liked that!) and you mentioned the previous Silver Aerid and the omen that he was, which again allows us to know more about this world's history and I thought it was a great way of showing us rather than telling us. 

      The end paragraph set things up very nicely for the next chapter as well!

      Again, improvements were made. Still a little bit of tense-swapping and spelling, but nothing that editing can't fix! I'd imagine the next few chapters will be even better again, especially when both POVs encounter one another. Keep it up!

      July 19, 2021 | Danny Power Hallihan (Dormant)


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      you are really barreling through this. and yeah, i can world build. its both the benefit and the curse of a autistic mind: it never stops.

       

      also, if i gave Sokuro's parents names to a gender, let me know cause, like i said, i forgot. their names are Inoute and Amosit. i honestly forgot which name is the dad's and which name is the mom's.

      July 19, 2021 | Zach Wood


    • Chapter: 5 Reply

      Reading a chapter a day isn't too taxing, I'm reading it in work so I have plenty of time to comb over it!

      Again, the immediate impression I'm getting here is that of improvement; there's more confidence in writing here, less mistakes than the others, and the dialogue between Crox and Arlye is the best I've seen so far in the novel. I'm warming up to Crox in particular as a character. The introduction of Arline in this chapter was also really well set-up, especially since this character explained more about the world through conversation instead of you simply telling us. Very well done there.

      The shift to Bran  - to show the perspective of somebody actually on the ground - was a great shift as well. The reader can see the difference between somebody on the ground and those in command. Great description and introduction to firearms in this chapter as well. You use Bran to explore more of the world as well for the reader, introducing us to some of the creatures that inhabit it. I lost my LIFE to the ostrich with a face as the front of its body ^^' 

      The shift to Sokoro's point of view - retelling the events up until the collison with Bran, just through her eyes instead - was also really well done. They are two completely different characters, so to see them actually interact with each other was interesting! Sokoro and the characters she lives with are much more mischevious and playful compared to the comparitively-cautious humans, so again you did a great job of differtiating them. The introduction of an entirely different language to their ears was great! I didn't expect it, there's a clear language barrier but even by the end of this chapter they were starting to figure things out!

      As I said earlier, this chapter is improved and better than the last few. The usual niggles are still present but they're fewer in number and again, a quick edit would fix them out. This is getting better with each chapter and I'm pretty invested in it now. Great work! 

       

      July 20, 2021 | Danny Power Hallihan (Dormant)