Musings In A Lounge Bar, a Romance story | SparkaTale

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Musings In A Lounge Bar

By: The Dragonlord

Status: Completed

Summary:

This is a sort of "metaphysical" story dating from when "transcendental meditation" was all the rage. It's a sort of introspective examination of the feelings engendered by the sightings of a particular girl. Sounds weird, but isn't really. It's just, well...musings, as a story.

Created: September 2, 2013 | Updated: September 2, 2013

Genre : Romance

Language : English

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Reviews (1)


  • D.M. Gergen

    I've been going back and forth on reading this one, but I finally clicked on the story and I'm glad I did. This story, although choppy in the beginning and at times in need of some minor editing, created a very bleak yet intriguing picture of marriage and relationships. The writing style was creative and the characters wonderfully drawn despite it being a short story. Although i wouldn't necessarily categorize this as a romance in the typical sense, it does a nice job of looking at a different aspect of relationships than stories of the Danielle Steele variety.

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    • Chapter: 1 Reply

      Watch your commas.  There are a few places where you have quite a few unnecessary ones.  The second paragraph for example.

      October 8, 2013 | D.M. Gergen