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Created: April 1, 2015 | Updated: May 10, 2015
Genre : Supernatural
Language : English
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Awesome story. A lot of suspense and it took some courage for Brandon to own up to his tragic mistake years earlier, but it looks like he past came back to haunt him with a vengeance. Your writing was techincally very good and you added a lot descriptive experience involving Brandon. Loved it.
April 4, 2015 | Cardiff 1984
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Enjoyed reading. You have a lot of talent. It was slightly freaky but in a pleasant way(I love stuff like that, by the way).
April 1, 2015 | Cheyenne Bennett
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Short stories aren't usually my thing. I typically favor stories that give me time to get invested in the characters and come to care about them. That said, this was fantastic. Going in, I wasn't sure what to expect and the ending definitely surprised me. That was a unique way for Janet to get revenge, and I really liked it. This is a short, simple, amazing little story that is well worth a read. It makes you think about how stupid decisions can, quite literally, come back to haunt you. Well done :)
April 11, 2015 | Serina Truscott-Duvall
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I must say, I hadn't expected Brandon to actually be linked to the ghost girl. That was an interesting turn of events.
There is one thing I should point out, though; you said that he hugged both of her parents when he told them what happened, but if her father was just getting off the couch afterward--to scream at him no less, as is his right--not only could Brandon not have hugged him, I doubt the man would have let him touch him at all.
Anyway, this was a unique twist on the ghostly hitchhiker urban legend. :)
April 17, 2015 | Shannon Rohrer
