Hiring Season, a Fantasy story | SparkaTale

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Hiring Season

By: T.T. Escurel

Status: In Progress

Summary:

As a job recruiter, Chase thought nothing could surprise him. He was wrong. When he finds Noel a new job at a tea shop, he discovers that her old job was the season, Winter. Suddenly, nature spirits of all types show up, looking for help. That's not his only problem. Winter is only three months away... how can he find someone to take her place? New Wednesdays and Sundays.

Created: August 29, 2013 | Updated: September 3, 2013

Genre : Fantasy

Language : English

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      This is really fun. I only have time right now to read the first chapter, but I intend to finish this. One thing to work on for future chapters is keeping your tenses all the same. There were maybe two or three points where you had a sentence in present tense while the rest was in past tense. I would also maybe take a little more time getting Chase's reaction before the other person appears demanding he find's winter's replacement. Maybe let him work a little and have her come at the end of the day. Then it wouldn't feel so rushed.

      August 29, 2013 | D.M. Gergen


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      Thanks for the feedback! Darn, I thought I caught them all. I originally wrote Episode 1 in 1st person/past and changed it to present to match how the rest of the story would progress. I must have missed a few! >_< I'll adjust those on my edit copy, along with the reaction timing at the end of Episode 1. In the mean time, I hope you enjoy the rest of the story. Tenses should be mostly stable from this point onward. Thank you!

      August 30, 2013 | T.T. Escurel


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      Chapter two was really funny. I loved it. I would maybe put some of your sentences together into bigger paragraphs, but I didn't notice really anything else in terms of editing. Nice work. Hopefully will read chapter 3 soon :)

      September 1, 2013 | D.M. Gergen


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      This is a very interesting concept, and I enjoy the different nature deities, and Fred's awesome. A few grammar mistakes sprinkled about, but not too bad. And maybe you could delve a little more into Chase's thoughts and relationships with his co-workers, but otherwise great story and I'm looking forward to what's next

      September 5, 2013 | Elizabeth M.