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Winterscape

By: Kesla Clark

Status: Completed

Summary:

Prompt: Write a poem or shot story by the following image *cover*

Created: November 15, 2014 | Updated: March 26, 2015

Genre : General

Language : English

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      This is a great response for a great exercise! The biggest thing I would suggest is that you stated several times that the cold temperature is something you welcomed. Emphasis is great, but the similar structure each time made it seem somewhat redundant, as if you had nothing different to say. At the end of the third paragraph, I believe the "welcome" should be past tense, so just check that. I like the ending, but it can be a bit abrupt. Why is it bathed in darkness? I'm assuming the sun set. Overall, great job, though! I love the second paragraph!

      December 27, 2014 | Kobayashi Kyoko