Should Have Been Mine, a General story | SparkaTale


Should Have Been Mine

By: RT 13

Status: Completed


A silent, unnoticeable watcher eyes a happy couple, but more specifically, what should have been hers.

Created: August 16, 2013 | Updated: September 25, 2013

Genre : General

Language : English

Reviews: 1 | Rating:

Comments: 4

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Reviews (1)

  • D.M. Gergen

    Although very, very short, this is a unique little blurb that makes you hope the author eventually writes more.

    August 29, 2013 Flag

Comments / Critiques

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    Have you considered making this into a larger piece? I think you could really do something interesting with having your character follow her former lover as a spirit. Even if it's just a short story or series, I think it would be wonderful.

    August 29, 2013 | D.M. Gergen

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    I haven't actually, but maybe I'll think about it. I have a bunch of other story ideas that are on hold already though on top of school work, so it might not happen. Thanks for the comment and the review!

    August 29, 2013 | RT 13

  • Chapter: 1 Reply

    This came up in the "random" suggestion, and i'm glad it did! I really liked this! It tells so much in so few words. I look forward to more of your work.

    September 19, 2013 | Tom Bombadil

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    Thank you! Glad you liked it and the 'random story' thing is a pretty cool feature :P

    September 19, 2013 | RT 13