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Equilibrium

By: Angelada A.

Status: Completed

Summary:

"She conjured worlds for him to end, so as to not leave him, once again, adrift into the void." -A tale of Death and Life.

Created: August 14, 2013 | Updated: August 28, 2013

Genre : Fantasy

Language : English

Reviews: 3 | Rating:

Comments: 1

Favorites: 1

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Reviews (3)


  • S.D Stevens

    Hi, Im new to the site and added my review to the comments by mistake! So here it is again with a rating too. Very poetic. Love the description and passion that comes out in the wording. It’s a shame it’s a complete work as there could possibly be more. But, I do see that’s the point. Hope to read some more of your work soon xXSXx

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    October 16, 2013 Flag


  • Maddie Horton

    The essential Ying and Yang story! It was enticing and beautiful to read; its mystery pulled me in with every word I read. It read like a Shakespearean sonnet (in the best sort of way), flowing smoothly across the page. And the end...the bitterness and sadness of it all left me aching for more. Wonderful job! Keep Writing!

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    September 10, 2013 Flag


  • D.M. Gergen

    This story was worth reading for the final line alone. That last little line really made the story and brought together all the ideas and descriptions that are weaved into this short story. There were a few places where the tenses changed from past to present and another minor error or two, but otherwise the writing is very good.

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    August 27, 2013 Flag


Comments / Critiques


    • Chapter: 1 Reply

      Very poetic. Love the description and passion that comes out in the wording. It’s a shame it’s a complete work as there could possibly be more. But, I do see that’s the point. Hope to read some more of your work soon

       

      xXSXx

      October 16, 2013 | S.D Stevens