The After World, a Horror story | SparkaTale

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The After World

By: Anna Robinson

Status: In Progress

Summary:

It would never be the same, she decided. The world was forever changed, never able to revert back to its previous state. It wasn't earth, it wasn't home, it was hell, and she was in it. Zombie, post apocalypse, end of the world fic! Possibly romance in later chapters, but unlikely or in very small amounts. GRAPHIC DESCRIPTIONS. GORE. MATURE LANGUAGE AND THEMES.

Created: February 23, 2014 | Updated: February 23, 2014

Genre : Horror

Language : English

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1: Preface 268
2: Chapter One 2791
Total Wordcount: 3059

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      • Chapter: 1 Reply

        First off, I want to give you a virtual high five for using that quote from Stephen King. He will forever be one of my favorite authors.

        Next, although this was short, I must say the paragraph about the noises of human existence was excellent. I've taken walks in the middle of the night before- I can assume that would be a little like the quiet of an apocalypse.

        It's early on but I like your descriptions and writing style very much. It's certainly a promising start and I'm off to read the first official chapter.

        February 23, 2014 | A . Nonymous


      • Chapter: 2 Reply

        I like our main character. She's strong and capable yet still showed a lot of humanity and vulnerability. She also had some snark to her, which certainly helped make her feel like a real teenage girl.

        Not much really happened after she took out those zombies at the 7-11 but it was a nice start. It did the job of providing the necessary framework to the world and the main character.

        Nice cliffhanger, by the way.

        February 23, 2014 | A . Nonymous


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        Oh my gosh. I am really happy that you reviewed and are happy with the way things are going, it really means a lot to me. 

        I'm glad that I managed to portray her correctly, as how you described her was exactly what I was going for. I tried to make her seem human and real, as while it can be nice to have the protagonist be some overpowered 'I can handle anything thrown at me' type who handles everything astonishingly well and saves the day, it is horribly unrealistic. 

         

        Admittedly, I might have had a slight moment of hyperventilating and alarmingly sped up heart rate when I read your comments due to my happiness. Thank you for reviews; it gave me the much needed gumption and determination to start writing the next chapter. By the way, I read over chapter one, and found some typos which you kindly withheld from your review. After putting up chapter two I'll put up the edited version of chapter one. 

         

        Thanks!!

         

        February 24, 2014 | Anna Robinson


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        Always nice to know I made someone happy. (-:

        Anyways, I often look over typos when critiquing\reviewing because frankly those aren't as important as the actual story substance to me, and although I appreciate it when people catch my typos I prefer comments on the story, characters, ect instead of my clumsy fingers. However, if you'd like me to point out the typos, just say so!

        February 24, 2014 | A . Nonymous