Status: In Progress
Summary:
Jeremiah Oakfield is a regular street rat in the year 2132. Or so everyone thought, Jere must over come challenges in a grueling task called the games. Will he make it out alive and become the champion the tyrant of a leader wants him to be or will he die in one of the three tasks ahead of him.
Created: August 13, 2013 | Updated: January 23, 2014
Genre : Fantasy
Language : English
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This is a good start. You have a nice idea here that could really be good but it was a little difficult to read due to the formatting. I would suggest separating your paragraphs with another space just so it's not so cramped. It would make it a little easier to read and not look so jumbled. I hope you continue this since I'm interested to see what being a champion entails :)August 26, 2013 | D.M. Gergen
