8bit Universe, a Fantasy story | SparkaTale

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8bit Universe

By: Le Sylveon

Status: In Progress

Summary:

A young boy and a strange fox are traversed to a galaxy where people go through worlds set up like video games.

Created: December 24, 2013 | Updated: January 6, 2014

Genre : Fantasy

Language : English

Reviews: 2 | Rating:

Comments: 0

Favorites: 3

Reads: 444


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1: Chapter 1 1103
2: Chapter 2 1118
3: Chapter 3 1238
Total Wordcount: 3459

Reviews (2)


  • Danny Power

    The idea for your story is quite good, I enjoyed reading it, but there are a few minor details that take the shine off your story: - It reads like a wall of text, it's much easier on the eye of the reader if you start a new line whenever someone speaks or thinks. -A few grammer errors, for example, 'it's' means 'it is' so when you write, for example, 'it's paw', it should be 'its paw' But these are small niggles, the story itself is good, keep it up!

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    July 31, 2014 Flag


  • Qazwsxedcrfvtgb Yhnujmikolp

    I really like the plot line of this story! The idea of being sucked into the gaming world is something that would intregue anyone, even if you're not a gamer. Keep on writing!

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    January 21, 2014 Flag


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